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What I'd Do by *DarkIceKitsune:iconDarkIceKitsune:

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I'd put his lovely wind-blown kiss
Inside a little jar
And watch it with a joyful bliss
That's brighter than the stars

I'd take her pretty little touch
And hold it in a sphere
Who's fragile walls remind me much
Of bubbles, bright and clear

I'd let their laughter, full of joy
Flutter around my head
And pull it out when I'm annoyed
So that I smile instead

But everything you do and say,
I'll let those fly 'round free
Because I know that those will play
Around my heart with glee
©2009 *DarkIceKitsune
:icondarkicekitsune:

Author's Comments

Hm, written a while back, I don't actually remember when as I found it on my computer in a file called "poems" XD

But, uh, yeah...I kinda like it. What do you guys think?

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:icontarantismsoul:
~tarantismsoul Jul 1, 2009, 2:29:57 PM
I like this, it has this cute feel to it ^_^

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Play the piano your fingers move on their own painting a beautiful melody, a tale of your very own <3
:icondarkicekitsune:
*DarkIceKitsune Jul 1, 2009, 2:32:31 PM
:3 aww, well thanks so much! that's lovely of you to say
X3 and the fave is greatly appreciated too. thank you! :hug:

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And you're hot...in kind of a cute little kid way that kinda makes one feel like a pedophile... ~ J9 to Dark
:icontarantismsoul:
~tarantismsoul Jul 1, 2009, 2:35:19 PM
you're very welcome ^_^

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Play the piano your fingers move on their own painting a beautiful melody, a tale of your very own <3
:iconkiltul:
=Kiltul Jul 1, 2009, 9:37:21 PM
Oh that sounds like a wonderful image. I can just imagine jars of blown kisses lining your walls, and bubbles of laughter and joy floating around your room.

actually, it sounds really girlie, kinda unlike you, but I could still see it.

--
Snails see the benefits,
The beauty in every inch.
:icondarkicekitsune:
*DarkIceKitsune Jul 1, 2009, 9:55:49 PM
XD I could girly them down.

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And you're hot...in kind of a cute little kid way that kinda makes one feel like a pedophile... ~ J9 to Dark
:iconkiltul:
=Kiltul Jul 1, 2009, 10:14:09 PM
yeah, you probably could

--
Snails see the benefits,
The beauty in every inch.
:iconanarchistantichrist:
~anarchistantichrist Jul 2, 2009, 11:40:42 AM
you mean whose, not who's.
rhythm of "Flutter around my head" sounds quirky, i might replace it with something like 'dart round and through my head' or some such... you know? and in the last line of that stanza, 'to make me' rather than 'so that i'. dunno why.
it's a most pretty poem, though. i like. :)
:icondarkicekitsune:
*DarkIceKitsune Jul 3, 2009, 1:57:12 PM
O.o oh, you're right, I did mean whose XD oops
hm...I dunno, I kinda like those how they are, but I know what you mean.
:3 and thanks

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And you're hot...in kind of a cute little kid way that kinda makes one feel like a pedophile... ~ J9 to Dark
:icondarkicekitsune:
*DarkIceKitsune Jul 3, 2009, 2:00:36 PM
I'm skilled like that, ya know?

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And you're hot...in kind of a cute little kid way that kinda makes one feel like a pedophile... ~ J9 to Dark
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